Bullet.
I am a contradiction.
Consumed
darkness
blacker than coal.
I am insane
I am a liar
twisted
contorted
hated.
I have multiple faces
lust
yearn
love.
Think of me
see me
hear me
touch me
curse me
then forget me.
God is a
bullet
inside
me.
Consumed
darkness
blacker than coal.
I am insane
I am a liar
twisted
contorted
hated.
I have multiple faces
lust
yearn
love.
Think of me
see me
hear me
touch me
curse me
then forget me.
God is a
bullet
inside
me.
posted by consise10 @ 12:54 AM
32 Comments:
At Wednesday, February 22, 2006 5:11:00 AM,
Jeanne said…
Wow. Perhaps the bullet will turn into a seed. Perhaps the seed will grow into a delicious fruit.
I doubt that anyone ever forgets you. Perhaps they avoid you if they are trying to avoid some aspect of themselves that you remind them of.
At Wednesday, February 22, 2006 9:03:00 PM,
consise10 said…
jeanne this comment of yours made me chuckle.Especially the first part about the fruit.
I also doubt that anyone 'forgets' you persay but 'reminding them of some aspect of ones self'hmmm...I have heard that before and often wondered about it myself. Thanks for dropping by and offering your wisdom.
At Thursday, February 23, 2006 1:24:00 AM,
Minka said…
Very well written. Short and poignant, as any bullet can be.
Yet, it can never be sharper than those words.
At Thursday, February 23, 2006 9:46:00 AM,
Tim Rice said…
Wow, this poem is full of emotions seeking to be expressed. Makes me do a bit of pondering. It might even express a bit of who each and every one of us are.
Thanks.
At Thursday, February 23, 2006 10:14:00 AM,
consise10 said…
Monika. Words can be a weapon, and kill just like a bullet can. Thanks for your imput I really appreciate it.
Tim. Your comments are interesting.When i wrote that piece I was feeling extremely negative.Thanks for dropping by,and offering your point of view.
At Friday, February 24, 2006 1:30:00 AM,
Anonymous said…
Janus, eh? :) and yes, you seem rather unforgettable, so I doubt you will be forgotten.
the bullet could be your semi-divine nature. we all have a piece of God in us, if you look at it a certain way, in the form of our souls. very well-done, I like it!
At Friday, February 24, 2006 4:08:00 AM,
Lisa said…
You are right. WOrds can be a weapon and kill just like a bullet can. The wound might heal but there will always be a scar...
At Saturday, February 25, 2006 1:16:00 AM,
Nic said…
consise,
I love the fact that harsh strong words actually portrays an honest part of everyone, whether we see ourselves that way or the way we think other see us. brillant, powerful, well done :)
At Sunday, February 26, 2006 7:46:00 PM,
consise10 said…
Greyor, your comment fascinates me.Thankyou. Is there a God divine? if so where can i find him ? God definately doesn`t reside in me.
Lisa so well said...Thankyou.
nic.. thanks for dropping by.
At Monday, February 27, 2006 3:11:00 PM,
Anonymous said…
The soul is a mystical thing. ;)
and by the way, I've been getting a bit more sleep lately, but other factors have been keeping me up... willfully, I might add! you take care too :-D
At Monday, February 27, 2006 7:21:00 PM,
consise10 said…
Ahh I see greyor. At times sleeping is not always a priority for me either. I have a habit of waking in the night and going for a run outside.It helps to calm the 'overactive' mind when'hypnos' is lacking.
At Tuesday, February 28, 2006 11:37:00 AM,
Fred said…
Forget you? No way.
At Tuesday, February 28, 2006 4:02:00 PM,
consise10 said…
Thanks for reading it Fred. :-)
At Tuesday, February 28, 2006 6:35:00 PM,
Autumn Storm said…
Oh gosh, powerful, confusing, clear and beautiful - how on earth did you manage to squeeze so much in there? Could only have come from deep inside. Hope you are doing okay, love and hugs from across the world and hopes you happiness in your moments, x
At Tuesday, February 28, 2006 6:35:00 PM,
Autumn Storm said…
you happiness=you find happiness
At Wednesday, March 01, 2006 7:15:00 PM,
consise10 said…
autumn storm. I love your writing and i have said that around the traps on more than one occassion. Thankyou for your warmth and encouragement.
daddy d. You are most welcome. Thankyou
At Thursday, March 02, 2006 9:02:00 AM,
charles blunt said…
Wish I had your way with words .
At Thursday, March 02, 2006 9:25:00 AM,
consise10 said…
Thanks for always dropping by and showing an interest...but 'God no' to your comment Charles.
At Tuesday, March 07, 2006 9:44:00 AM,
ange said…
You write very well.
Your words are touching.
I hope you are ok?!
At Tuesday, March 07, 2006 10:17:00 AM,
consise10 said…
This was conceived during one of those moments of madness ange. Thanks for your message and concern.
At Tuesday, March 07, 2006 12:53:00 PM,
Åñèè§å said…
thanks for stopping by my blog :)
At Tuesday, March 07, 2006 6:17:00 PM,
Minka said…
That bullet has been in teh air for quite a while now ;)
At Wednesday, March 08, 2006 6:33:00 PM,
Jeanne said…
That's right. The lava has solidified by now, and it's safe to walk on.
At Wednesday, March 08, 2006 6:46:00 PM,
consise10 said…
Hello again monika and jeanne. Both your comments have made me smile.Amid all the anger frustration and depression..this was a moment in time and it`s passed..however a lugubrious dullness still lingers. Thankyou both for dropping by and showing an ongoing interest.
At Friday, March 10, 2006 4:00:00 PM,
SuperP. said…
That was excellent. Many of us feel all those things.. in side of our 'self' and God is indeed the bullet inside the self, ripping us away from the horrors of those seven deadly sins.
I suppose I shouldn't assume to know exactly what you meant by your poem, but I loved it, anyway.. the end was perfect, powerful and poignant.
At Friday, March 10, 2006 6:08:00 PM,
consise10 said…
You are always welcome Penny,and thanks for not assuming..I appreciate that.
Anessa..take care of yourself
At Tuesday, March 14, 2006 4:04:00 PM,
SuperP. said…
God resides in us all if we let him.
Are you letting him?
At Tuesday, March 14, 2006 4:45:00 PM,
consise10 said…
In me.. I doubt it penny
At Friday, March 17, 2006 10:45:00 PM,
zypsy said…
"straight between the eyes" lines!!
At Friday, March 17, 2006 11:03:00 PM,
consise10 said…
True... very true Zypsy.Thanks for dropping by.
At Saturday, March 25, 2006 9:56:00 PM,
Cie Cheesemeister said…
I think this is kind of Sylvia Plath in feeling.
In other words I like it.
I'm not good at critiquing stuff, so I can't say anything more intelligent than that! :-)
At Sunday, March 26, 2006 10:18:00 AM,
consise10 said…
The difference between Syvia Plath and I is she is in a place I`d love to be.
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